tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2684536971172270103.post326241928180301221..comments2023-10-09T12:06:17.459+01:00Comments on Emerging Writer: Poem for the TFE Poetry busEmerging Writerhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06539530495238043923noreply@blogger.comBlogger10125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2684536971172270103.post-78689309727019796862010-03-09T18:30:44.335+00:002010-03-09T18:30:44.335+00:00All these slumbering commuters (bar one)unaware th...All these slumbering commuters (bar one)unaware that while they sleep the silver surfer is keeping an eye on their world from a rooftop somewhere in Birmingham. Like it.Pure Fictionhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04265599089734430505noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2684536971172270103.post-14441263455065690032010-03-09T16:55:34.900+00:002010-03-09T16:55:34.900+00:00I really liked, "We sudden on the outskirts&q...I really liked, "We sudden on the outskirts". I wanted to be on your train; it was a welcoming kind of feeling that I got from this.Kat Mortensenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16877694888419628533noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2684536971172270103.post-78189961019552623932010-03-08T22:18:18.248+00:002010-03-08T22:18:18.248+00:00I really enjoyed the coupling of the mundane with ...I really enjoyed the coupling of the mundane with the unexpected, and there are some very beautiful lines in the poem. I like both you and the Silver Surfer as observers.<br />Was the Silver Surfer always good? I found his otherworld certainity a little above good/evil in human terms.<br /><br />Also reminds me of the incongruity of things you do see on train journeys. I went past Stratford the day they were putting the roof on the Olympic Aquatic Centre (which is sports-speak for swimming pool, I think) and was transfixed.Titushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16380213493011623153noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2684536971172270103.post-19905688325773770562010-03-08T19:10:20.743+00:002010-03-08T19:10:20.743+00:00Loved the blinds line :)
Wasn't expecting the...Loved the blinds line :)<br /><br />Wasn't expecting the sudden appearnace of the silver surfer though! (despite giveaway pic...)Domestic Oubhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17298706907126418711noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2684536971172270103.post-68186755942432278572010-03-08T19:10:20.742+00:002010-03-08T19:10:20.742+00:00"The sky has woken a weary grey, an over-wash..."The sky has woken a weary grey, an over-washed vest." Loved that! Amnd the silver surfer, like a flash of silver in the dull hues of the rest of it, great stuff!Argenthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10532506690426639326noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2684536971172270103.post-8971499759674840832010-03-08T17:23:31.991+00:002010-03-08T17:23:31.991+00:00mmm, yeah, who'd'a thunk it? Surprising wh...mmm, yeah, who'd'a thunk it? Surprising what you can see from the train. Sounds just like the 5:58 from here to Paris, with all the awkward sleeping businesspeople.NanUhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11596765792663269178noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2684536971172270103.post-66727507701533038302010-03-08T14:27:06.258+00:002010-03-08T14:27:06.258+00:00Love the grey vest sky and sooty horses in this
:...Love the grey vest sky and sooty horses in this<br /><br />:)Niamh Bhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06519443787482685320noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2684536971172270103.post-12189181452318641842010-03-08T12:25:15.757+00:002010-03-08T12:25:15.757+00:00Yes, I can relate to this also! Seemed to take an ...Yes, I can relate to this also! Seemed to take an eternity. And going the other way, being herded through a shed in case you were a terrorist!<br />"We sudden on the outskirts" Is that deliberate or a typo?<br />Love the eyelid blinds!Peter Gouldinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13292063172122249202noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2684536971172270103.post-73868561780219762832010-03-08T12:07:45.916+00:002010-03-08T12:07:45.916+00:00i really want to see where you go with this. the s...i really want to see where you go with this. the silver surfer in birmingham!? that's a winner for me every time!swisshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17924594772578153947noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2684536971172270103.post-88042268948839447792010-03-08T09:48:16.883+00:002010-03-08T09:48:16.883+00:00Nice one EW, a trip I made many a time as a kid in...Nice one EW, a trip I made many a time as a kid in the days of suitcases, with metal handles and corners, that were heavier than a hod of bricks and no seats on the boat train and sick as a dog on the eternal boat and sicker than a sick dog on the crowded bus down to the country.<br />Happy days!Totalfeckineejithttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05352708391465031655noreply@blogger.com