Sunday, 12 September 2010

Poetry Bus - a colour for a ticket

The Poetry Bus this week is driven by Marion at Dragonfly.

Colours - I have quite a few poems about colours. Someone once recommended using colours in my writing for visual effect and to make my writing more colourful. I'm just saying...

I have one coming out in the Autumn issue of Magma so I can't post it here yet so here's another.

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13 comments:

  1. Totalfeckineejit12 September 2010 at 13:21

    Brilliant achingly sumptuos tragic.

    Love Magma, nice one!

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  2. Kat Mortensen12 September 2010 at 14:31

    Wow! The first hint, "He doesn't like gloss" to that final line, I found myself racing to finish it because of the ominousness that was building. Really ingenious.

    Kat (I keep telling people, I'm still thinking, so don't visit me yet. Unless you want to read my Magpie Tale, which would be most welcome.)

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  3. Rachel Fox12 September 2010 at 21:22

    Very vibrant.
    x

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  4. Emerging Writer12 September 2010 at 23:22

    Thanks. I've been messing with this idea for a while

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  5. Titus12 September 2010 at 23:44

    This was a sumptuous jewel of a poem. I loved the insertion of the disappearing rose man and
    "There’s a book about misery in Easons –
    the spine’s just the right tinge of crimson."
    Class job.

    And as a literalist, I think you'll find YSL's no. 67 is the very dab.

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  6. Karen13 September 2010 at 02:59

    Love all of the shades of red, and that last line is a kicker!

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  7. Peter Goulding13 September 2010 at 03:58

    Yup, I'm always searching for that perfect shade of lippy too. Very sensual

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  8. Niamh B13 September 2010 at 07:24

    Yup, like this one alot.

    Nicely done

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  9. Bubba13 September 2010 at 15:54

    Too bad you weren't trying to match a paint color instead, because they could just scan your bloody lip and get it perfect.

    An interesting stop for the Poetry Bus, E.R.

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  10. NanU14 September 2010 at 12:31

    You're so right! Red is my favorite color, but one of the trickiest to get exactly right. Love how you finish the wine.

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  11. Marion14 September 2010 at 15:46

    I love this. Not only the colors, but the textures, too, just jump off the page. Thanks for riding the Poetry Bus with me!! Blessings!

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  12. Emerging Writer14 September 2010 at 19:38

    I shall look out YSL's no. 67. Thanks everyone for letting me ride the bus, lippy or no lippy

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  13. Erratic Thoughts15 September 2010 at 06:58

    Very very Interesting take on the prompt.Loved the story weaved in it!:)

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