This week it's Enchanted Oak in the driver's seat. Click the link for other passengers, a diverse and startling bunch as ever I've seen of a Sunday, and public transport does have a habit of picking up all sorts. I have a soft spot for my Dukes of Hazzard man on the Blanchardstown Bus once.
I chose the boat picture.
Ebb Tide Drift
I've taken the poem down again now to rework and perhaps submit to some lucky journal.
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I think my eyes are going...I read this as 'yucky journal' first!
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I suppose lucky and yucky could co-exist...
Stopped by to read. I enjoyed this. Thans for posting
The future, now, that’s different.
That’s up for grabs.
All you have to do is take your pole,find your own oars.
The future’s a current;
go with the flow.
I rather liked these lines regrouped - hope you don't mind my playing with them? I couldn't resist a little fiddle! :)
"The future's a current" is a wonderful play on words. I like your vision here, the boat as representative of life choices. And that business about the three paw prints on the dock is really fine. Nice work, Emerging!
Thanks for stopping by. I'm trying not to drift so going with the flow wouldn't work so well. I have my own path (and all that)
Oh, good to have you back.
I was going to write something about certain lines, but on a few re-readings this is just wholely good.
I really enjoyed ths piece, it's lyrical rather laid-back pace. A kin to being in a boat
An optimistic poem - and it's hard to "do optimistic" I think, always easier to write in a minor key.
"The future’s a current" and "find your own oars" I liked those lines.My current mindset is somewhere between these. I am trying to figure out whether to go with the flow or dig another way/stream/brook and le'em follow..
I liked it a lot!:)
think my last comment went walkies, anyway - enjoyed the poem - full of movement and motivational
Thanks everyone. My first motivational poem? I think it could use more meat myself...what do you think?
I really liked this :) Hopefully a very lucky journal will snap it up
I like the paw prints. you propose a journey, the dog (?) is taking one already.
Growing older is wonderful ... one does tend to 'go with the flow.' I enjoyed your poem ...........
a perfect sentiment! just gorgeous!
Fuck the flow, let's paddle our own canoes!!
You am de woman!
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