Sunday, 12 September 2010

Poetry Bus - a colour for a ticket

The Poetry Bus this week is driven by Marion at Dragonfly.

Colours - I have quite a few poems about colours. Someone once recommended using colours in my writing for visual effect and to make my writing more colourful. I'm just saying...

I have one coming out in the Autumn issue of Magma so I can't post it here yet so here's another.

Removed now for rework and potential print publication

13 comments:

Totalfeckineejit said...

Brilliant achingly sumptuos tragic.

Love Magma, nice one!

Kat Mortensen said...

Wow! The first hint, "He doesn't like gloss" to that final line, I found myself racing to finish it because of the ominousness that was building. Really ingenious.

Kat (I keep telling people, I'm still thinking, so don't visit me yet. Unless you want to read my Magpie Tale, which would be most welcome.)

Rachel Fox said...

Very vibrant.
x

Emerging Writer said...

Thanks. I've been messing with this idea for a while

Titus said...

This was a sumptuous jewel of a poem. I loved the insertion of the disappearing rose man and
"There’s a book about misery in Easons –
the spine’s just the right tinge of crimson."
Class job.

And as a literalist, I think you'll find YSL's no. 67 is the very dab.

Karen said...

Love all of the shades of red, and that last line is a kicker!

Peter Goulding said...

Yup, I'm always searching for that perfect shade of lippy too. Very sensual

Niamh B said...

Yup, like this one alot.

Nicely done

Eric Alder said...

Too bad you weren't trying to match a paint color instead, because they could just scan your bloody lip and get it perfect.

An interesting stop for the Poetry Bus, E.R.

NanU said...

You're so right! Red is my favorite color, but one of the trickiest to get exactly right. Love how you finish the wine.

Marion said...

I love this. Not only the colors, but the textures, too, just jump off the page. Thanks for riding the Poetry Bus with me!! Blessings!

Emerging Writer said...

I shall look out YSL's no. 67. Thanks everyone for letting me ride the bus, lippy or no lippy

Erratic Thoughts said...

Very very Interesting take on the prompt.Loved the story weaved in it!:)